Post by Moonlight on Feb 3, 2011 23:03:35 GMT -5
All right ... You do meet basic requirements for the human portion of the character sheet. But its choppy, and doesn't really flow when describing who she is. I'd suggest picturing her fully, then rewriting it. Most specifically, her bio is what needs expansion.
Also, for your pokemon ... I notice a lot of things were blank and/or skimpy. While the pokemon requirements aren't as steep, a bit of information about them would be nice. Each pokemon is a character in itself.
Also, for your pokemon ... I notice a lot of things were blank and/or skimpy. While the pokemon requirements aren't as steep, a bit of information about them would be nice. Each pokemon is a character in itself.